sports are great.

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My opinion is that is sports important to you. Is sports important to me or is music important than sport. Do you agree that sports are important then music or you disagree that music is important then sport. I agree that sports is important than music because music you just sit on you bum all day. Sports keep you active and it keeps you fit and healthy. Do you want to be sitting down and being a blobfish all day. No I would go out there being fit and healthy and building up your friendship.

My first reason is Do you want to sit on your bumm all day or get out there and do sport? What do you want to do? Because I would want to go out there and get lot’s of friends and be fit. I wouldn’t like to be unfit and unhealthy I want to be fit and healthy. Like Shaun Johnson, Kevin Locke, Billy Slater, Roger Tuivasa-Sheck, Joshua addo-carr, Greg inglis, Jordan Rapana, Mose Mbye, Danny levi, James tedesco, Ben barba, Kodi nikorima, Cooper cronk, Anthony milford, Benji marshall.

My second reason is do you want to be a star rugby player because I would I would like to be like a healthy rugby player would you like to be a famous rugby player I would I would play for the Hurricanes and the Crusaders the Highlander and poison I would like to be in is first five or half back number 10 or 9.

My third reason is if you really love so much well you should grow up and be like Beauden Barrett, Lima sopoaga and richie mo'unga because I would them there are one of the top first fives they are so famous I always watch them on youtube because that's my dream is to grow up and be like them there and one more person Reiko ioanei.

In summary now that's my goal is to be a star player and be like Beauden Barrett, Lima Sopoaga , Richie Mo'unga, Rieko ioane, Shaun Johnson, Kevin Locke, Billy Slater, Roger Tuivasa-Sheck well that’s one of my goals and that should be one of your’s to.