Playing rugby league live 3 with my brother.

WALT improve our writing by carefully checking our sentences and trying to add descriptive language. I think I am a bit successful.

I did not use that much descriptive words.  I will need to work on it more next time.

Playing rugby league live 3 with my brother.

On a nice sunny morning me I was up with my dad and my dad said you're up with the bird’s” my dad was poring he was watching a pouring movie and the was Mahana. So I went over the shed side and played my game rugby-league live 3 I made my own team it was so fun my brother Mana woke up and he said after you.” and I said yup you’re gonna have to wait a long time because I'm making a team he replied where right here let me make my own team yup I will just get the rest of my team. Later on I was finish and my brother Mana. My team was called the MEAN HEARTY WARRIORS and my brother Manas team name was the GANGSTERS. His team looked better then mine.

Shortly after the game was done it was a Golden point. I almost got a try with David Klemmer but I got tackled from Tyrone Pechey. My team player Nathan Friend pass the ball to Shaun Johnson and I done a drop goal my team won. And I was so so goddamn happy and the score was 6 to 7 my team won. It went on day kai time boyz my dad yelled out yup coming dad I replied.” So I said yup that's us mana lets go for a kai. For kai it was eggs on toast and porridge. That was yummy thank you for the kai dad. I felt like I wanted a shower so when I went for a shower it was on hot as it felt nice and fresh like kaiwi lakes. After that I got dried and dressed I felt a bit tired so I went in my room and went to sleep. It was so fun with my brother and when I vs him I would never forget that day with my brother.

Next time I will use more descriptive language words in to my work.